This is my first and it's in the works. First 2 chapters are up. 

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You could use some editing, but the basic story's good. Love Dinotopia :)

I think the biggest thing is that it seems unfinished to me. It may just be how that website works, but I think your two chapters could be one, and you could expand what you've got. Like right now it seems like you've got an outline more than a story, which is fine, you just need to flesh it out some.

I was planning on having that ending, then give a background story, and make the story lead up to that ending.

I mean more sensation details :) like knowing more to place you in the story. Just being honest, but someone else might disagree with me.


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