"I like both very much. Very short, abrupt, punctual and curt.I agree that you need to work on the flow of the first; it seems almost choppy at some points. The imagery was good, though.The second was good, I liked it. The title and content continue…"
"I actually rather like the first poem. Its jarring, yes, but its seems like its supposed to be jarring. Its supposed to have that effect on you, and it'll stick with me.
The second one was a bit odd, and though poetic, its more of a mystery to…"
I would be eternally grateful to anyone who would read and review these for me!ApologiesYou tell herYou are sorryAnd she laughsCruellyBecause she doesn't believe you And you walk awayAshamedBecause you reallyHad meant itTuesday Nights"I'm going to bury myself alive,"She says,Words whispered against his neckLips brushing his skin as she speaks.He laughsLow in his chestTangling his hands through her hairAnd drops a fiercely gentle kiss on her foreheadBefore he answers,"Good luck with that." See More