Hello there, the New Zealanders nerdfighters have this beautiful little tight knit group on facebook where they have discussions and organise gatherings and such. I've been looking around and I can't seem to find anything like that for Australian nerdfighters so I decided to create my own group. Here's the link if you'd like to join: http://www.facebook.com/groups/169762799779631/ (:
this is what i've got so far, pardon the lengthy-ness
Students began to flow out of the exits at the Sacred Heart High School. Two young girls meet each other under a tree, "Hey Sophie, what's up? I want to get home before it rains." Said the shorter of the two looking up at the graying sky.
"Sorry," Sophie said rummaging through her bag "I got an umbrella just in case, got it!" She pulled out an envelope and handed it to the other girl. "Sorry it took so long to get you the invitations, I've been tring to catch you!"
The other girl tookit "It's all right, I've already got her the gift. I've been getting good grades so I hope my parents won't mind the last minute-ness" They started walking.
"Yeah, Me too." Sophie pulled out her umbrella "What are you going wear to the party?"
The brunette froze "Oh crap!" She always wore casual cloths but this was her best friend's sweet sixteen! She wanted everything to be formal, what's the word she used? Princess-like.
The taller strawberry blond pulled out a cell phone "Don't worry, I know what to do" She waited a moment then "Hey sis? Remember that girl I hung out with last week at the book store?...The one who was drawing in her journal...Yes!Her! She need cloths for the- what? You can but your only going to be wearing one outfit right?Your closets full of party-going stuff. Ok you already know I've been in your closet, Jordan." She rolled her eyes. "She's going to get something from your closet one way or another, Jordan, either you help us and have a say in what we can or cant take, or we raid your room like piranhas on a cow. I've done it before I'll do it again. You know you can't miss that date tonight..."
The girl was surprised how determined she was, couldn't they just go shopping or rummage through the garage for her mum's old dresses? She shook her headRummaging throughthe garage? For her mother's old cloths?I'm not desperate! but a little voice inside her said Yes you are.
" Great! Love ya sis!" She hung up the turned to her friend "So when can you come over?"
"Uh.."
"You know what? I'll go straight to your house and explain everything to your parents and see if they can drop us off."
***
After persuading her parents and trying on what felt like thousand of awkward, shiny, tight, and far too reveling outfits. "Cant we just buy a simple little black dress?"
Sophie looked at her as if the just asked if she could go naked and not worry about the cloths "Are you kidding!? We need to find something that pops out you don't want to blend into the background! You do that way too much!"
"What do you mean?"
"Your always hanging back like your of in another world."
"I like to daydream."
"Yeah, you can do that when you become a novelist and you'll be doing it for a living!"
The other girl laughed "I'm not gunna be a novelist! Whats the difference between a novelist and a park bench, Sophie?"
"I dunno -"
"A park bench can support a family"
Sophie laughed "Come on stick to the subject. Ok Katie said she wanted something Princess like."
"Should I just get fitted for a tuxedo?"
"Ha ha, hm...princess princess...god how would it be if women still had to wear hoop skirts?"
"...Oh my god." the other said in horror "Or corsets!"
"HUZZAH!!!" Sophie shouted and pulled out a small dress that was a crisp light blue dress and a navy blue corset over it. "Put it on!"
"I've got some jewelry to go with that" said Jordan as she rummaged and found two swirly silver bracelets with a matching earrings. "Here you go."
"Ooh! This is nice! I like it!"
Sophie scoffed "Nice. It's bloody brilliant!Look at you! Kay your still my shoe size and I know exactly what to get you." She darts out of the room and back in with silver stilettos."
"Oh my god, can I even walk in those things?"
"There not meant for walking. Now hurry up we might be late!"
***
A tall girl with long red curls wore a Cinderella like dress and a tierra with her hair beautiful pillowed behind her sparkling little crown. The brunett felt suddenly , extreamly underdressed. I'm the village girl who pretends to be cleaning.
Katie hugged them "I'm so glad you guys could come. You can set the gifts over on the table."
"Glad to be here Katie!" said Sophie and she put her gifts on the table.
"You look amazing!"
"Thanks!" said Katie "Go on have fun! Im afraid we already cut the cake but theres plenty left still. Allong with everything else." she smiled and walked away.
As she left a caterer walked over to them, " Champane?"
"Oo Thank you."
they took the last two glasses
"Enjoy the party." he said and walked off
"So what should we do now, Sophie?"
***
A man in a tuxeto watches the girls from the opposite side of the room. The catterer walks by with the empty tray and swiftly takes it out of his hand and balances it in his own.
"Sir!Gi-"
"Its empty anyway! Think of it as one more you don't have to wash." He said and walked away
He took a drink from a table, and pretended to take a sip while he slipped a small tablet in the liquid. He searched for the girls, as he placed it on the tray
k , so far in the story the to-be-kiddnaped girl is trying to figure out what to wear and as you could imagin thats quuite boring, what should i do to try to hook the readers?
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Hi Ado!
Sorry for the pretty late reply, I never get on the Ning these days. I just popped on to look at something for a friend.
Best wishes!
havent read the most recent ones but the ones i do have are AWESOME!
also YAY australia!
i dont know
Students began to flow out of the exits at the Sacred Heart High School. Two young girls meet each other under a tree, "Hey Sophie, what's up? I want to get home before it rains." Said the shorter of the two looking up at the graying sky.
"Sorry," Sophie said rummaging through her bag "I got an umbrella just in case, got it!" She pulled out an envelope and handed it to the other girl. "Sorry it took so long to get you the invitations, I've been tring to catch you!"
The other girl tookit "It's all right, I've already got her the gift. I've been getting good grades so I hope my parents won't mind the last minute-ness" They started walking.
"Yeah, Me too." Sophie pulled out her umbrella "What are you going wear to the party?"
The brunette froze "Oh crap!" She always wore casual cloths but this was her best friend's sweet sixteen! She wanted everything to be formal, what's the word she used? Princess-like.
The taller strawberry blond pulled out a cell phone "Don't worry, I know what to do" She waited a moment then "Hey sis? Remember that girl I hung out with last week at the book store?...The one who was drawing in her journal...Yes!Her! She need cloths for the- what? You can but your only going to be wearing one outfit right?Your closets full of party-going stuff. Ok you already know I've been in your closet, Jordan." She rolled her eyes. "She's going to get something from your closet one way or another, Jordan, either you help us and have a say in what we can or cant take, or we raid your room like piranhas on a cow. I've done it before I'll do it again. You know you can't miss that date tonight..."
The girl was surprised how determined she was, couldn't they just go shopping or rummage through the garage for her mum's old dresses? She shook her headRummaging throughthe garage? For her mother's old cloths?I'm not desperate! but a little voice inside her said Yes you are.
" Great! Love ya sis!" She hung up the turned to her friend "So when can you come over?"
"Uh.."
"You know what? I'll go straight to your house and explain everything to your parents and see if they can drop us off."
***
After persuading her parents and trying on what felt like thousand of awkward, shiny, tight, and far too reveling outfits. "Cant we just buy a simple little black dress?"
Sophie looked at her as if the just asked if she could go naked and not worry about the cloths "Are you kidding!? We need to find something that pops out you don't want to blend into the background! You do that way too much!"
"What do you mean?"
"Your always hanging back like your of in another world."
"I like to daydream."
"Yeah, you can do that when you become a novelist and you'll be doing it for a living!"
The other girl laughed "I'm not gunna be a novelist! Whats the difference between a novelist and a park bench, Sophie?"
"I dunno -"
"A park bench can support a family"
Sophie laughed "Come on stick to the subject. Ok Katie said she wanted something Princess like."
"Should I just get fitted for a tuxedo?"
"Ha ha, hm...princess princess...god how would it be if women still had to wear hoop skirts?"
"...Oh my god." the other said in horror "Or corsets!"
"HUZZAH!!!" Sophie shouted and pulled out a small dress that was a crisp light blue dress and a navy blue corset over it. "Put it on!"
"I've got some jewelry to go with that" said Jordan as she rummaged and found two swirly silver bracelets with a matching earrings. "Here you go."
"Ooh! This is nice! I like it!"
Sophie scoffed "Nice. It's bloody brilliant!Look at you! Kay your still my shoe size and I know exactly what to get you." She darts out of the room and back in with silver stilettos."
"Oh my god, can I even walk in those things?"
"There not meant for walking. Now hurry up we might be late!"
***
A tall girl with long red curls wore a Cinderella like dress and a tierra with her hair beautiful pillowed behind her sparkling little crown. The brunett felt suddenly , extreamly underdressed. I'm the village girl who pretends to be cleaning.
Katie hugged them "I'm so glad you guys could come. You can set the gifts over on the table."
"Glad to be here Katie!" said Sophie and she put her gifts on the table.
"You look amazing!"
"Thanks!" said Katie "Go on have fun! Im afraid we already cut the cake but theres plenty left still. Allong with everything else." she smiled and walked away.
As she left a caterer walked over to them, " Champane?"
"Oo Thank you."
they took the last two glasses
"Enjoy the party." he said and walked off
"So what should we do now, Sophie?"
***
A man in a tuxeto watches the girls from the opposite side of the room. The catterer walks by with the empty tray and swiftly takes it out of his hand and balances it in his own.
"Sir!Gi-"
"Its empty anyway! Think of it as one more you don't have to wash." He said and walked away
He took a drink from a table, and pretended to take a sip while he slipped a small tablet in the liquid. He searched for the girls, as he placed it on the tray
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